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Those Shoes'll Kill Ya

Saturday, April 28, 2007

Mal and Inara have an unpleasant walk back to the ship. A good bit of stubborn bickering, a few sweet moments of Mal caring for Inara, and a warning against impractical footwear.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4233    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Mal was weary, more from the arguing than the walking. He and Inara were stranded on Jiangyin, a good twenty miles out from Serenity, after crashing the shuttle. Crash may be the wrong word. Safely landed with unintentional gusto. Not totaled, but it wouldn’t fly again, which meant they had to walk back. Totally her fault – at least, that’s what he kept telling himself. Not that he could hear much over her constant yammering. As they walked, it amazed him how much they had to talk about, and that even the most sedate of topics could be turned into something controversial.

A chill hung in the air, so that the moisture frosted around them. The morning rains had created a virtual quagmire, and at times, his boots would sink in up to the ankles in the cold, slushy mud. Inara had been pacing him at first, but took to following so she could trace his footsteps and not sink quite so much.

“Those shoes’ll kill ya,” he criticized, interrupting her tirade on molded protein.

“Why are we talking about my shoes?”

“Look at ‘em, all high-heeled and fancy strapped!” Mal paused and pointed, giving her an opportunity to regain her footing. The shoes were open-toed, with two delicately beaded straps over the top and a red ribbon around the ankle. The heel was about 4 inches higher than the toe, which was already two inches off the ground. Must’ve been a tall client. She used the brief stop to stabilize on both feet, pulling her maroon cloak tighter around her body. Even with his coat, Mal could feel the chill and he knew she must be freezing… except for the argument keeping her blood boiling.

“Not practical for walkin’.”

“I can walk just fine.”

“We got a day’s journey back to Serenity and they’re already slowin’ us down.”

“Only because you’ve stopped walking to stare at them!”

“I ain’t –”

“You set the pace, Mal,” she said icily. “I’ll keep up.

*~*

Inara’s feet ached from the tall shoes, her toes were freezing, and she could feel a blister starting to form where the strap was rubbing her skin raw. She’d

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Saturday, 28 April 2007 17:09
Surreal and entertaining, good work
Saturday, 28 April 2007 20:39
Val, your muse must be putting in overtime. All the better for us, your adoring fans. I *heart* this fic! I mean, I LOVED it! I'm still smiling! =D
Saturday, 28 April 2007 20:53
Oh, I like this very much. Both characters perfect.
Saturday, 28 April 2007 23:01
Wonderful work, ValerieBean.

Mal, ever the upstanding rogue, heroically working to save Inara, his damsel in distress... even if she doesn't think she needs saving. Sigh.

I love the scene in the cave, where Mal gives her the shirt and coat off his back (literally) to make her comfortable on the floor. Just... aww.

And your characters... every word, every action fits perfectly with what we know. Mal's underplayed gentlemanly streak, Inara's armored vulnerability... Your muse is indeed working overtime.

Keep up the fantastic work.
Sunday, 29 April 2007 02:37
goood stuff! I really enjoyed reading it
Sunday, 29 April 2007 11:15
Love your writing in this - just fluffy and tangy enough at the same time.
Sunday, 29 April 2007 16:08
This was wonderful! Especially loved Inara's feverish vulnerability when Mal kisses her. There's something about this story that never lets you get too comfortable--very appropriate for this pair. Thanks!
Monday, 30 April 2007 00:51
This was really terrific. I love the idea of Mal and Inara being stranded and having a "fight to the death" over impractical shoes - it is so very much like them!

I really think you captured them well and I just love it!
Tuesday, 01 May 2007 03:57
Fantastic work here, valeriebean! Definitely could picture this as an episode we lost out on seeing after "Objects in Space" and before "Those Left Behind"...the antagonistic relationship with obvious undertones of love being the strongest before Inara's departure;)

BEB
Tuesday, 01 May 2007 14:43
I love it, love it, love it. Seriously, one of the best M/I stories that I have read in a long while. The dialogue, the story movement... great work.
Friday, 14 November 2008 23:18
Love this, how the good gorram did I miss it? Inara was so in character, they both were, and trust her to throw her shoes at Mal when he joked with her once they were safe. Seems her gratitude only goes so far. Really thought the banter was great. Ali D :~)
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