Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL
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A.N. – The texture of these narrations is a bit different, so let me know if you still like it.

PART 7: HE WORKED

Mal balanced and reclined as best he could in the stiff hospital chair, Little Zoë asleep on his lap. The color had returned to her face, but her shoulders still slumped, having carried more weight in the past three months than any five-year-old should ever be asked to carry. Thanks to Simon’s top-three-percent medical expertise and his connections to core physicians, Little Zoë had received cutting edge treatment and was recovering quickly. The only reason they were still in the hospital was that Serenity was not clean enough for her weakened immune system. It broke his heart that the home he had provided, the ship he loved, was not safe for his little girl.

Mal rocked Little Zoë in his arms, enveloped in her recovery, giving only the vaguest attention to Jayne as he spoke. Jayne had come in a half hour ago, looking unbalanced with all his weapons concealed (as hospitals weren’t prone to allowing heavily armed mercenaries roam the corridors) and begun his speech with his lifelong mantra.

“Mal, we need coin.”

It was about there that Mal had stopped listening. The need for income was just one more plague on his existence. Hospital bills, port taxes, food. Even if he sold his boat, that would only buy a few more days planet-side. He didn’t even want to dwell on the new mouth he’d be feeding in eight months time... Well, maybe he could dwell on his and Inara’s coming baby for a moment. Erase all the fear, insecurity, and poverty, and hold on to the promise of happiness.

“We can’t wait much more.” Jayne’s voice cut through the promise with his own take on reality. Mal shifted the sleeping Zoë so she wouldn’t put his whole left arm out, and he thought of his crew. They hovered in his memory, separated from the current situation by a lifetime and then some. He needed to disband and let them go their own way. They all wanted to stay together, Mal knew; and if he didn’t Jayne w

Comments
Friday, 13 April 2007 02:54
Adorable! Gotta love little Zoe. I'm thinking, at this rate 'baba' Mal is going to have white hair before his own son can even crawl. Hope there is lots more to come. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 13 April 2007 02:55
i loved this! this series is fast becoming one of my favorites of all time! i adore what you're doing with the characters and the reactions...just beautiful! thank you for posting again!!!!
Friday, 13 April 2007 03:44
Oh! That was wonderful! I'm so glad everyone is all right! And I like this new Jayne, yes, indeed. This story just makes me all teary-eyed. I hope you'll continue with this.
Friday, 13 April 2007 05:42
Oh, this was so great, because it swung from sweet to angsty and back to sweet again! I just loved each bit. It was all great, although I have to admit when Zoe asked about the peanut butter and then dropped the bomb that Inara had gone to the hospital, I almost fell to the floor right along with Mal!
Friday, 13 April 2007 19:14
love this! Mama 'Nara...sweet

Please write Little Zoe and Baby Cole, now.
Sunday, 15 April 2007 20:55
Damn...you really know how to walk the tightrope, don't ya valeriebean? Cuz I will be damned if you haven't managed to nail Joss' mantra about go dark and angsty, but tell a joke for God's sake;D

BEB
Tuesday, 24 April 2007 12:50
Woah! Sweetness and surprises all in one! First off, I love the new Jayne, and Mal's realisation that the crew isn't going to leave him, even if he tries to get rid of them. That's the way it goes!

Little Zoe is just brilliant, I loved her calm reveal that Inara was in hospital, and her complaint about the doctor! I definitely see bits of Wash and Zoe in her :-)

Wonderful work, once again!
Sunday, 13 May 2007 04:27
Apologies for my late review, ValerieBean...

First off, I love that Jayne's stepped up and assumed his new role as first mate... he may have a gruff, crude exterior, but underneath Jayne's got a heart of gold.

Mal trying to figure out when Inara had to be taken to the hospital by measuring time in sandwiches was simply hilarious; capturing perfectly the attitude of a young child even in the midst of a crisis.

Finally, Mal in the hospital looking for Zoe was absolutely heart-wrenching... little Zoe's inherited her mother's tact for stealth.

Most excellent work.

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