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"Not Sleeping"

Thursday, April 12, 2007

"The Captain isn't the only one who cannot sleep."

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4690    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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TITLE: "NOT SLEEPING"

AUTHOR: Alison M. DOBELL

FANDOM: "FIREFLY"

PAIRING: Mal. Simon.

RATING: G.

STATUS: Standalone. Set after the Big Damn Movie

ARCHIVE: Yes. Just let me know where.

FEEDBACK: Welcomed.

EMAIL: AlisonMDobell@aol.com

WEBSITE: http://unilelu.net/Alison/Ali00.html

SUMMARY: "The Captain isn't the only one who cannot

sleep."

The usual disclaimers apply. The characters and 'Firefly'

are the property and gift of Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy.

No infringement of copyright is intended.

"NOT SLEEPING"

"Firefly" story

Written by Alison M. DOBELL

* * * * *

It was quiet. Dead of night. No one stirring but him. The loose cog in a wheel that didn't turn no more. Least that's how it felt. Except now, when the Black clothed him in her stillness and the quiet hum of Serenity's engine in idle lulled his aching heart and soul. It was the time when he could just be. When Captain didn't mean a damn and all the troubles of the day had yet to be born. A time when...

"Was it worth it?"

The quiet voice was like a jolt, jarring him out of that calm moment of tranquility that came so rarely to him that he felt cheated. Angry almost except he had no idea what Simon Tam was talking about. "*Shenme*? You should be sleepin'."

Simon ignored the comment, his mind fixed on something else. Boy sure had focus. "Miranda."

The 'verse came crashing down on him then. Another Serenity Valley only this one was his own creation. May have been the right thing to do but it cost him. Cost them all. And afterwards, had the 'verse changed? Had the evil men that used the might of the Alliance to crush anyone daring to want to lead their own lives been brought to book? Not a one. But it was the personal cost that stopped him sleeping nights. "If you're askin' me if I knew what was gonna happen would I do it again? Can't say I'd be so keen."

"It was a mad, foolish and utterly irresponsible

Comments
Thursday, 12 April 2007 14:33
Very nice! You've captured them both so well, which doesn't surprise me in the least. *g*

I love the last line! Mal is so psychotic! *giggles*

"I love my captain."
Thursday, 12 April 2007 16:07
I LOVE your use of imagery. " Silence fell, like it was sentient and cautious"; "even her wiles had wiles"; "click of her heels ... like nails driving home the unspoken vow"; "Minutes stretched then joined hands"; (just to name a few) ... This is amazing use of imagery and added so much to the story. Also, good beat on what it takes to cheer Mal up. Nice story. :)
Thursday, 12 April 2007 16:23
Really good characterization of Mal and Simon. And the imagery....wish I could write half as good as you do.
Thursday, 12 April 2007 16:34
Oh, this was most excellent. I love the conversation between Mal and Simon. They've got such an interesting dynamic and you did very well with them here!

And Mal wanting to tell Zoe why Simon isn't sleeping is just great!

Can't find a thing to complain about! :)
Thursday, 12 April 2007 22:55
Love that Mal/Simon ineraction. You write beautifully. (PS> Thanks for the lovely comment on my story. It was my first post, and I was antsy.)
Friday, 13 April 2007 00:07
"Straightening he decided to get some coffee on the boil then he would go take her a mug. If she didn't just faint with the novelty of it the gesture might just chase away the last of whatever nightmares were plaguing her. Then, when she had her first good mouthful he would tell her why Simon hadn't been sleeping."

I love your internal monologue for Mal. Both eloquent and rim-ish. Beautiful story.
Sunday, 15 April 2007 04:44
Wonderful - a great balance and illustration of Mal and Simon's relationship. Mal's internal thoughts regarding Inara leaving were spot on and sharp - biting just as you imagine the loss to be.

Absolutely wonderful. Thanks!
Sunday, 15 April 2007 19:40
Wow...gotta say I am all kinds of impressed here, AMDOBELL. Mal and Simon moments, IMO, are really fun to tackle because of mirrored core natures framed with completely opposing shells. And having this kind of quiet moment of honesty and wisdom happen between them? Takes a certain kind of writer to get it down pat;D

Do wish that Inara hadn't buggered off, but maybe it would have been the outcome anyway had the series lasted long enough to get past the storyline pared down to make the BDM. Have to agree with previous statements and say Mal's internal monologue about how her departure affected him was just all kinds of brilliant in the imagery and emotions it comjured up.

BEB
Sunday, 15 April 2007 23:40
Thanks to everyone for all the shiny comments, it is appreciated. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me

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