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Fade

Monday, March 5, 2007

My first submission. Not edited, tweaked, or critiqued yet.

CATEGORY: FILK    TIMES READ: 2055    RATING: 8.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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From a distance,

everything a cloudy haze

(but only for those never there).

For me a clear path

through there ( though Joyless).

Few see it,

fewer still choose to walk the narrow here

to the end (but there is no end).

Fading recollections of the people

(but they are all gone).

like me/waiting/searching

for the guide

To the clearing at the end of this path

Comments
PSYLEX
Monday, 05 March 2007 06:40
It didn't format quite right when I posted it just now. It should be spread all around the page back and forth. Oh well.
PSYLEX
Monday, 05 March 2007 06:41
It didn't format quite right when I posted it just now. It should be spread all around the page back and forth for a better effect. Oh well.
Monday, 05 March 2007 08:05
Definitely some great work here, Psylex...though you goofed on in the first stanza, with what I presume should be "cloudy" appearing as "couldy."

That and I get the feeling Harken and the moderators around here probably don't allow for poetry and written stuff with unique formatting. Things gotta fit an appearance mould around here, I'm afraid;)

BEB

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