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Buccaneers - act four

Friday, December 15, 2006

"Imagine the worst thing that you can do to a character, then do it."-Bujold. (Heads up, Zoe!) Time to go home.

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ACT FOUR

Ext – Serenity on the ground – Persephone.

Camera swings around to reveal the cargo doors open. Rhampal and Mal are standing on the ramp.

Rhampal

Gonna cut you free now. You, me and the pilot are gonna make the drop. Wingnut and Moira are gonna stay on board with your mechanic to make sure it all goes smooth.

Mal

Smooth is good.

Wingnut appears with River and his knife. He cuts Mal free – two quick slashes. He steps back to say something to Rhampal, giving River and Mal a moment.

Mal

First chance you get, you use that unarmed combat thing you got going to take these guys down.

River

(Giving him a look) Well, now you tell me.

Mal looks more than a smidgen crestfallen as Rhampal walks up.

Rhampal

Let’s go.

The three of them walk down the ramp and out into the world.

Reverse angle – a truck is approaching; it stops and men disembark – one obvious leader and some flunkies. They start to unload some heavy lifting gear, while the boss, Tzu, a very large man, approaches Mal.

Mal

Dr Tzu, it’s good to see you again. That diet’s doin’ the business. I swear you musta lost at least 60 pounds.

Tzu

(laughingly) 47. I think I must have given it to you. You’re started to look a little chunky.

Mal

I know it. My problem is that every time I sleep with your wife she gives me a cookie.

Angle on Rhampal – he can’t believe this banter.

Tzu

Don’t I know it? She does like a man who doesn’t need room in the front of his pants.

Mal

Ouch. That was below the belt.

Tzu

Kinda the point, Mal.

Mal

See that’s probably my tragic flaw. I thought the point was you gi

Comments
Friday, 15 December 2006 01:05
And I'm done.

My intention in writing this was to "pilot a new season." Consequently, I've tried to throw as many conflicts and complications into the air as I can: pregnancy and a rival for Zoe, trouble for Kaylee and Simon, how Inara killed Declan and why oesn't she want to go to Sihnon, which is really why she left in the first place.

However, the frustration of formatting has ensured that I won't be writing the next episode any time soon, if at all.

If anyone feels the desire to investigate any of these ideas - help yourself. I have no sense of ownership of Joss' people or setting.
Friday, 15 December 2006 05:43
You sure that you don't wanna keep this up? Cuz you've got more than a couple of brilliant ideas up in the air...and having someone else catch them right means a lot of trust. Make sure you get someone you trust explictly to take over the reins if you choose that option, hughff;)

So Inara's got some crazy designer virus in her system or something then? Cuz I can't really see how Declan could die that fast when Inara has not seemingly had the time to take anything that would get spread to a sexual partner...and I would expect the Buccaner's crew would have searched Inara after getting aboard...

BEB
Saturday, 16 December 2006 01:25
Oh, please continue It! I would but I would probably screw up your story. Or I would have to modify some things on this one.

Shiny ^^
Saturday, 16 December 2006 12:10
Pity you don\'t want to continue because you write really good.

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