The Christmas disaster
Samantha was sitting on her bed folding her clothes and neatly laying them into separate piles in her suitcase .Her mouth was watering at the thought of going home to her mum’s home cooked turkey. She couldn’t wait she never missed a Christmas with her family. She grabbed her notebook and started ticking through her list passport , money ….. everything was there.
“beep, beep” her taxi had arrived to take her to the airport .Samantha grabbed her coat and house keys and locked the door on her way out .She quickly opened the car boot and through her suitcase into the boot . She was so excited about going home this Christmas as she was going to meet her new baby brother . she has only ever seen him a few times and that is only by photograph . She cant wait to see his beautiful wee feet and hold his tiny soft hands . it was at this point that something snapped her out of her dream . There was a load bang and the car jerked forward . the taxi stopped quickly and the taxi driver jumped out of the car . She looked out of the back window and saw her driver arguing with a large stranger .She looked at her watch and noticed if she was to stay here for much longer she would probably miss her flight . She got out of the car “driver I am sorry to bother you at a moment like this but I have a really important plane to catch im going to visit my family this Christmas “
“ im so sorry miss but this guy has dented my bumper and it says in my contract if something like this situation was to happen we were to exchange details and wait for the police to arrive”
“but you don’t understand I haven’t seen my familt for a whole year I have a new baby brother I really cant miss my flight”
“ look miss ill be as quick as possible but right now I really cant do anything so please sit back in the car”
Samantha walked back to the car and put her head in her kness and rocked back and forth . She took out her watch and examined it closely. It was 7:30 and her flight was at eight . There was no way for her to get t
Critically, you're friend needs to totally reformat the sentence and paragraph structure, as everything runs together. That and the character's thoughts seem rather muddled. I see gold...but one has to dig a bit to get to it.
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