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What I want…what I need - Part 5

Saturday, November 4, 2006

What I want…what I need - Part 5 - Jayne/Zoe pairing. NC-17 (for sexual content). Smutty -- wanting and needing--and a job gets complicated. All belongs to joss...I'm just doing the borrowing thing a lot. Please leave comments, all are read and appreciated (good or bad).

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3138    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“Take it easy Jayne, your body is going to need time to heal. The drugs I used to treat you will have weakened your immune system, and caused some muscle deterioration.”

Jayne swung his legs over the side of the exam table, “I feel fine Doc.” He felt like shit but damned if he’d admit it to top three percent standin’ over lookin’ all ‘gee I’m so smart…I saved your sorry life again.’ He should feel grateful, but his head ached, throat was raw, damn muscles were tight and weak. Felt like he got caught in a fair fight, an’ ruttin’ lost.

Zoe leaned casually against the door to the infirmary, arms folded, “Is he giving you any trouble Simon?”

“Not likely, he’s as weak as a baby. I could take him with one arm behind my back.” Simon said as he busied himself packing away vials of medicine.

“Ya feelin’ lucky Doc?” Jayne said sourly as he stretched his shoulders, a challenge in his eyes. Sure Simon was a little blurry in that damn white coat against the white walls of the infirmary. So what, there was two of him. He’d hit ‘em both.

“Jayne, you do realize that Simon just saved your life, right?” Zoe’s condemning look, fuzzy, but unmistakable deflated some of his irritation.

“I think for the first time I may have second thoughts about saving a patient.” Simon stared at his hands a shadow of self-loathing twitching across his face.

“Well, I weren’t gonna hurt him or nothin’…well not too bad.”

Simon sneered safely across the room.

Zoe cocked her head at Jayne.

He groaned, “Awright, come ‘ere Doc, you did save my life…so ahhh, gimme me a hug.”

“Are you insane?”

Zoe looked at Simon out of the corner of her eye, “Did he hit his head?”

“No, but there was the no oxygen thing…” Simon said backing out of the infirmary when it looked like Jayne was going to try to hug him. He slipped past Zoe and bolted down the hall.

Zoe’s dimples softened her face, “Why do you pick on Simon? He’s saved your life and patched you up more times than I can count.”

“Hell, it’s just too easy.”

He cl

Comments
NAILANI
Saturday, 04 November 2006 19:17
I am enjoy this series very very much! Keep writing!
KITTYKAT26
Saturday, 04 November 2006 20:39
This is freakin' great. I agree please keep writing!
Sunday, 05 November 2006 12:57
I'm glad to see this series continuing. Well written, though you do need to watch for using colloquial language when in the third person.
Sunday, 05 November 2006 15:15
I have waited so long for an update to this story!!! I love it! You have captured these characters so well. Jayne/Zoe just makes sense to me and you've given them crediblity as a couple. Thanks for that! I read parts 4 and 5 at work and couldn't stop laughing at Jayne's description of River to Mal. I also couldn't tear my eyes away from the screen in 5 when Zoe finally came to Jayne's bunk. Very sensuous and smokin'!! Please update faster if you can. Must know what danger lies ahead and what Fanti and Mingo are hiding about this guy. Great story!
Monday, 06 November 2006 06:43
Ya know...I really don't like having to be critical. Feels kinda pointless with something of this kind of top-grade quality to nitpick...but I feel you want to work within the reality/'verse Joss gave us;)

Zoe's gun? It's a Mare's Leg, which is rifle that's been modified via a shortened stock and barrel to be like an oversized pistol. In the case of Zoe's sidearm, it's a sawed-off Winchester lever-action, Model 1892 or later, that fires a .44-40 or a .45 Colt bullet. Your line of text about Jayne being amazed that hands that can fire such a weapon as Zoe's gun could shake while touching Jayne stays perfect in its imagery and importance...just not in its technical accuracy;)

Still...to make up for my OCD when it comes to weapons of painful death, I will say that few people can write intimate moments with any kind of real honesty. Fewer people can do it for characters where the match-up is seen as weird. But I have to admit you surpass them all, mercenarysong, with the level of emotion and pure descriptive power you had going here when Zoe and Jayne were making love. For that, I salute ya:D

BEB
MERCENARYSONG
Monday, 06 November 2006 16:47
BEB -

I definitely want to stay true so your OCD --way cool to me. I really appeciate the help. As you can see I was floundering on the weapons side so your insight is totally appreciated -- I'll fix it rightaway. And thanks for the good words. They mean a lot to me.

-mercenarysong
Tuesday, 07 November 2006 15:54
Hmm...appetite for what? I'm intrigued. I love stories that bring out Jayne's sweeter side, and this did so in spades! Loved it!
Wednesday, 08 November 2006 23:10
Two more great installments to a nice series. Very dramatic with both of these chapters! I loved Jayne's comments about River in the last one and his reactions to Zoe and Kaylee here were so very perfect!

(but, it should be "dyin'" rather than "diein'")

I really think you should consider posting this series over at the Zoe/Jayne community at livejournal (http://community.livejournal.com/mercandthemate/). It's a small comm, but I know they'd love it!
Friday, 10 November 2006 02:09
I have to ask... When's Part 6? I'm dying to read more!!!
MERCENARYSONG
Friday, 10 November 2006 06:21
Gypsy15-

I wish I could say. I'm still working on it. I'm aiming for next Friday but work is crazy and (although I wish this was my job) I write whenever I get a free minute, usually that's after midnight. More information than you asked for I know...ok short answer...hopefully next weekend.

-mercsong
Monday, 20 November 2006 12:54
More, please!

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