Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

We Win

Thursday, November 2, 2006

What happens immediately after the Operatives words 'It's finished. We're finished?'

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It's finished. We're finished.

(Mal still has his gun unholstered. River her two 'swords'. She stops looking over her shoulder, towards the crew. There is an awkward silence. Mal holsters his gun)

You're not gonna make this any easier are you?

(River is still standing still, almost frozen in place. Almost afraid to look at the carnage around her. Mal walks upto her, takes her weapons off her, and drops them. Gives a tight smile, and nods towards Simon)

You just gonna stand there? Go see to your brother.

(River looks at Simon still lying there, and starts walking uncertainly towards him, mal squeezes her shoulder and gives her a small shove. He turns to face the Special Ops team still standing there, now with the weapons lowered)

If you are planning no letting us live it would be a good notion not to let my crew die of their injuries.

(On of the special Ops calls for medics over his comm, heard in the background as Mal turns around and starts walking back towards his crew. None of the others seem capable of standing. Except Inara, but she is holding pressure of the doc's wound. River is kneeling next to her.)

What a lazy crew, just lying around. Do I pay you to just sit there?

Something funny?

Any you walk away from, right? Zoe, I never thought I would see the day.

(Zoe just looks at him. Blinks a question. Mal is slightly unsteady on his feet, has a big grin on his face. And can barely get his words out over a painful laugh)

We Win.

(The crew that can look at him almost incredulously)

We beat the the Mighty Alliance. Special forces, Zoe. We got the better of them.

You're the only one still standing sir

(As soon as Zoe says this, Mal falls backwards to the ground. Unconscious. A beat)

Did he just go crazy and die?

(Inara scurries over and feels for a pulse)

Just crazy.

Comments
NBZ
Thursday, 02 November 2006 00:19
Ok, this time it is a little more than the sound test I did last time around. Still some sentences are anonymous to see wether they sound right. But more explanation. and everyone probably knows the setting.
Thursday, 02 November 2006 00:40
i liked that. there really did need to be a bridge between the alliance getting called off, and Serenity being repaired.
Friday, 03 November 2006 07:23
Ok...a tad bit hard to tell what was dialogue and what was descriptive text...but mighty shiny work here, nbz:D

Totally loved Zoe and Inara little bit of comic hilarity when Mal collapses from his injuries and they make a funny about it;)

BEB
Friday, 31 August 2007 22:23
see SEE! voices VOICES!!

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