Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

WAR DIARIES OF A SINNER Chapter 1

Saturday, October 21, 2006

Book wasn't born a shepherd, he was born Brian M. Yong, an ex-colonel surprisingly, and unwillingly, brought out of retirement by the Alliance to fight in the Unification War.----In this chapter Yong gets an unexpected message.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1861    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Sweat was streaming down on both Yong’s temples soaking the towel lying under his head on the bench, while Yong himself kept pressing up the last dozen, always keeping to the faint rhythmic humming of the engine that could even be heard here in the cargo hold.

The captain’s distorted voice cracked from the con: “Brian! You better interrupt your workout and come up here real quick.”

Yong stopped pushing the bar, wiped his face and neck and come over to the com.

“What’s up, Ann?”

“Some interesting you might figure”, she answered in her usual oblique way. “Came up from the cortex just now. Seems kinda official-some to me.”

“What’s that got’do with me?”

“It’s addressed to you personally, man. Or should I say Mr Colonel-of-the-reserve-Brian-M-Yong, Sir?” there was a short pause, then a loud laugh over the com.

Yong rushed up the stairs and through the common area, which was in a mess as usual, towards the Zedong’s cockpit. Ann Doben, the old Firefly’s captain and pilot, was already awaiting him, smiling from one ear to the other as it seemed. The plump brunette was in her mid-thirties, around ten years younger than Yong himself.

“You read it?” Yong asked her.

“Can’t. It’s coded. Only said who’t was for, and that’s you. But Colonel, eh? Not bad. Knew you were ex-military, but colonel? My, I’m surprised you’re talking orders from a civilian draft-dodger like me.”

“You’re a woman, Ann.”

“I know. That’s how I dodged.”

“Okay, you’ve had your fun. Can you please send it to the terminal in my bunk so I can read it in private?”

“Secrets? From me? That might’ve hurt my feelings just a bit.”

“Put it through, will you. I’ll let you in on the details soon enough. Those you have to know.”

“Alright.”

In his bunk, Yong opened the message with a quick authentication of his fingerprint and his service identification number he was still wearing around his neck on a chain. Minutes later, his expression hardened with every line he read.

"Alliance Staff Headquarters

Sihnon

August 23, 25

Comments
Saturday, 21 October 2006 19:40
I'd really appreciate comments on this, even if you think that the story sucks. I've never written this kind of stuff in English before (not my first language, you know), so please comment.
Monday, 23 October 2006 04:33
Well...it's damn short...too damn short for my taste. Pretty sure the BDM established Book's first names (at least as a Shepherd, anyway) as "Derrial" nor "Meria." And I am assuming Book got his commission reinstated after the war began...cuz I was under the impression the Unification War was 2506-11;)

Still...makes me wonder what Book did to get dishonourably discharged in the first place. I can see it being something that caused him to enter the priesthood after the war (getting drummed out)...but previously? Gonna want to see some plot;D

BEB
Monday, 23 October 2006 10:13
maybe it's a bit confusing at first. i thought that Book had a military career long before the U-War but as he is also rather street-wise, knows things that are not strictly military and he mentions riding in a firefly a long time ago, it makes sense that he didn't spend all his life in the military. i needed a reason why he had to leave the military between his service and his reinstatement during U-War, and I wanted to have a new mystery around my Book, which is why he left the military the first time. it is going to be an issue in chapters to come. Of course the U-War started in 2506, but I figured that they didn't recall officers who had a blemish on their record unless they were really needed. but thanks for the comment

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