THE PURSUIT SERIES: 11. "Hitting the Fan"
Friday, October 6, 2006
"All kinds of revelations bering everybody to a point of conflict that cannot be avoided."
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3864 RATING: 9.0 (G) SERIES: FIREFLY
TITLE: "HITTING THE FAN"
AUTHOR: Alison M. DOBELL
FANDOM: "FIREFLY"
PAIRING: No specific pairing.
RATING: G.
STATUS: SEQUEL to "EPICENTRE"
ARCHIVE: Yes. Just let me know where.
FEEDBACK: Welcomed.
EMAIL: AlisonMDobell@aol.com
WEBSITE: http://unilelu.net/Alison/Ali00.html
SUMMARY: "All kinds of revelations bring everybody to
a point of conflict that cannot be avoided."
The usual disclaimers apply. The characters and 'Firefly'
are the property and gift of Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy.
No infringement of copyright is intended.
"HITTING THE FAN"
"Firefly" story
Written by Alison M. DOBELL
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It was the strangest thing. Even though all the gorram corridors looked the same Jayne knew exactly which ones to take. He was tense and all manner of keyed up, ready to do whatever was needful when he came to an abrupt halt. The mercenary stood irresolute, not sure why he had stopped but no longer feeling the over riding imperative to keep going. His mind was empty, thoughts derailed. Feeling the sudden impulse to rest a moment he sat, his back against the wall. Alert. Waiting. Jayne had no notion of the passage of time but turned his head at a slight noise coming down the corridor from the direction he had come. He rose to his feet and awaited his destiny.
Chin Li emerged in his red battle armour, two swords in scabbards on his back, a gun in his right hand with laser sight and hairline trigger. Jayne did not have to ask its' specifications to know how deadly it could be. The mercenary felt an itch beneath his scalp like some buried memory trying to get out but nothing penetrated except his mission. Not even the incongruity of joining forces with his enemy to take down his friends.
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Inara stared, not sure what she could say or do to turn this around. Then she caught the look in the Senator's eyes and realised there was nothing she could do or say. No argument that woul
I like Simon's continued fear of his Emu, and that the monkeys took notice of Kaylee's proximity to Simon was a nice little touch.
Very interesting story and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Now he looked intrigued. Good. Inara did not smile, made no pretence that she was about to enjoy any of this, but she did effect a slight air of boredom. As if it was the waiting that was tiresome not the coming event. "I need to freshen up. If there is somewhere I can...?" *Perfect Inara here trying as she can to formulate a plan to help her friends, or at least visit a little revenge on thier impending demise.
Simon stared at Wash as if he had two heads. Come to think of it when the parakeet moved like that he almost did have. Optical illusions. Had to love them. After all, some people juggled geese. "Why is that?" *great tie back to the BDS, I always love it when writers do this in a subtle way, and you did it here.
The inner sanctum was like an oasis of light in the belly of hell. From the dim interior to the centre an oddly pristine room confounded their senses. Every wall and doorway into that room was transparent. The whole thing a huge glass orb easily twenty feet in diameter. Malcolm Reynolds stared, for suspended in the very centre of it was a much smaller spherical case, again transparent. He almost choked on what he was looking at. *very good description here of the scene and Mal's reaction.
"It's a human brain." Said Zoe, her voice flat and emotionless but her eyes sparking with a deep anger. *visions of an old star trek episode...hmmm...dunno why...LOL, like it, good job.
The Captain could see where Wash was coming from but couldn't believe it would be that simple. Naturally it wasn't.*LOL perfect description of Mal's reaction to Wash's simpleton ways.
She nodded and stood, letting Simon keep a hold of her shoulder while she got her balance back. "*Qu*. When they had no more use for him they threw him away." *Great River, speak, and actions.
Biting her lip and trying not to cry out, Inara watched in silence as the youngest most vulnerable member of Serenity's dysfunctional family set about telling the others how they could bring about their own escape. *This is wonderful, the description of the crew as a dysfunctional family....so very true, they have big functional problems, and things don't often work out well, they always seem to have eachother at the forefront of their minds.
And the ending.....I always like cliff-hangers and you've put one together here. Good job!
Still...you are really rocking our socks off, Alison! Definitely loved the spot-on dialogue and behaviour...though if this is a pre-BDM storyline, why does River get called "little albatross?"
;)
BEB
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