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It Feels Like Home part 7

Friday, September 29, 2006

Post Serenity – Simon and Kaylee try to have a talk. But nothing goes as planned.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1655    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Kaylee walked into the passenger dorms and noticed that the light to the infirmary was still lit. Walking closer she stopped inside of the door. Glancing around, she noticed that the room was vacant. Releasing a quick sad sigh she turned off the lights and turned to head back to her bunk.

‘It is very late and everybody had a long day. Simon must be asleep by now.’ Kaylee thought.

Just as she was about to leave the passenger common room to head to bed a voice stopped her.

“Kaylee?”

Kaylee turned around slowly. Simon stood only a few feet away. Kaylee placed a small smile on her face.

“Simon I thought that you were asleep by now?” Kaylee started to fiddle around with her hands.

Simon moved forward a few steps. “I was just getting ready to go. Did you need something?”

Kaylee was going to make an excuse to leave but stopped when she remembered what the captain said.

“I want you young lady to go to that infirmary and get that doctor to clean and fix up that cut on your head and I also want you to let that man tell you what he wanted to say earlier without stopping him.”

“Oh yes I was coming to see if…you were…still up…so you could look…look at my head.” Kaylee never looked Simon in the eyes because she was too afraid that she would cry.

Simon took her hand and didn’t fail to notice that Kaylee tensed at his touch. “Let’s take a look at it then.” he said smiling at her as he pulled her with him to the infirmary. He reached over and turned back on the lights that Kaylee had just turned off moments before.

Simon placed his hands on each side of Kaylee and lifted her until she was settled on the exam table. Kaylee was shocked by his actions and glanced at him for a moment confused.

‘He never helped me like that before.’ She thought. ‘He defiantly wouldn’t place his hands on me like that. It’s not proper even for a doctor.’

Simon smiled at her then lifted one of his hands from her waist and brushed back her hair on the side that her cut was on. He then slowly removed the bandag

Comments
Friday, 29 September 2006 16:58
Though I've just found this series, I do have a couple of comments...

First of all, it's been interesting watching your writing develope, you're putting more detail in now than you did in previous chapters and, as a reader, I appreciate that.

Second, I agree with a comment made by Leiasky a few chapters ago... you might want to look into a beta reader to check for spelling (I'll volunteer if you want, I'm decent with spelling, but hopeless in regards to grammer).

Third, I'm really enjoying this series and I really like what you're doing with it... please don't make me wait 3 months for the next chapter (you posted several in May, I think one or two in June, and this is the first since).

Stay shiny
Friday, 29 September 2006 22:59
I'd be willing to help out too, Heather. You write well, but there are still some minor points needin work;)

And I really hope you can get Simon to lock Kaylee in a room with himself till he confesses how he feels. Cuz this back and forth of missed moments is getting kinda...cliched;D

BEB
Saturday, 30 September 2006 00:37
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HEATHER
Saturday, 30 September 2006 21:38
If you would like to be my beta give me someway to send it to you and I'll love to have you, goblueguy or BEB.

I'm glade you all enjoy it. More will be up soon.
~Hugs~


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