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Sanctuary

Wednesday, May 21, 2003

What if, River's brother never came for her? What if, the crew of Serenity was just a dream? What if, they were a fantasy to get River through the next day of testing and experimenting?

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4885    RATING: 8.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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SANCTUARY

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Author’s Note: There are spelling mistakes and tense mistakes, I Know. This has not been seen by a beta. Sarah forgive me. I used semicolons and ellipsis's. Tell me what y'all think about the story, not the grammar.

Disclaimer: Not mine, of course.

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“And his folks come by to fetch him, and it turns out he's, like, fourteen years old,” Kaylee’s voice echoed across Serenity’s cargo bay.

Book and Jayne thundered down the stairs, moving to the weight bench preparing to begin their usual routine of weight lifting starting with the bench press. Jayne sat down to begin his set of lifting repetitions as Book moved to spot for him. They conversed with one another and neither acknowledged the girls a few feet away.

Kaylee and River were sitting on the cargo bay floor, playing jacks. Laughing Kaylee continued her story, “I mean, he must've been some kind of genetic experiment, 'cause, I swear this guy was, uh...” She emphasized her point by waggling her eyebrows, “Oh, my daddy whipped me so hard.”

Kaylee bounced the ball and absently picked up her spoils of jacks as she challenged River, “Oh... I'm at fours. Let's see you match that.”

River took the ball in her hand and surveys hard at the scattered jacks on the floor.

“I can win this,” River studied the position of the jacks. Mathematically calculating the necessary position and force required to-be asserted for victory.

“Oh, I'm hearin' a lot of talk there, genius. Come on -- show me what you got,” Kaylee quips.

River only looked for a moment to reflect on the context of the quip before her attention was drawn back to the situation. Holding the little rubber ball in her fingertips, River studied the texture, marking the imperfections that would cause an unpredictable bounce if dropped on. Course chosen, she thrust the ball down. It followed its predetermined mathematical course.

River’s mind seemed to follow that rubbe

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 21 May 2003 02:19
BC

Very interesting.
Wednesday, 21 May 2003 09:36
I was in the process of proofreading your fic when I saw this one. I almost thought it was the one I was working on. I read the start of each paragraph to make sure it wasn't. I will come back here and read this in full tomorrow. Lookin' forward to it.
Wednesday, 21 May 2003 15:19
Interesting portrayal of River at school. All other fics just tend to have her tied to a chair being tortured. Does this take place after she’s only been at the school for a short time, or is she semi-calm/normal because of blue hand man's medicine?
LJC
Wednesday, 21 May 2003 15:56
This is a way nifty little piece! Gives me shivers--especially her populating "Serenity" with hospital staff.
Thursday, 22 May 2003 16:33
The original parts of this are deeply spooky. I read it as she had been returned to the facility and was using her memories of Serenity to stay "River" rather than Cadet Alpha.
Thursday, 22 May 2003 16:56
I read it differently, Sarahetc. I read it that River had created all of Serenity in her mind. Great concept Talrius, kind of a variation on Buffy in the insane asylum. And just as disturbing.
Friday, 23 May 2003 05:16
Okay, let me clear things up. Futuresmith is dead on. I wrote this piece as Simon never rescued his Sister. Serenity is a fabrication. Sarah got the second piece. River is using the fabricated memories to remain an individual.

Just something interesting. The original title for this fic was Echoes of Serenity.
Wednesday, 31 December 2003 00:34
That is amazing. The parts where they are testing her, those can send a chill down my spine. I figured out everyhing that you said other people figured out. I love this little fanfic. (I have a connection with River, but that is my little secret, and I ain't ever tellin'!)
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 00:04
beautiful...spooky, painful to read river ending up like that, but beautiful none the less

very well done.
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 00:05
beautiful...spooky, painful to read river ending up like that, but beautiful none the less

very well done.
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 00:06
ah the curse of the double post...browser troubles srry about that
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 19 November 2005 19:08
That was so very good. I just love River and Simon AU stories; they have so many possibilities. My favorite scene was the one in the downtime room with the window letting in sunlight and birdsongs, until River touched it and realized it was a lie(I think I cried through the rest of the story). The Serenity scenes were so beautifully portrayed with her longing to be safe with her brother. Even though you said never in the opening, I just have to think of him still coming for her as I can't stand the thought of leaving her in that place. So please consider a sequel, I would love to read you take on it.

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