Inara had got back to resuming her unpacking. Every item she pulled from trunks seem to hold a memory to her of a past client some she remember fondly and had good memories others were not so memorable. Then there was loud knock on the door. “This maybe the Captain apologising” Inara thought to herself as she went to open the door.
There in front of her stood a man clean shaven money pouch in one hand and gun in the other. Inara looked in up and down before she spoke.
“ Can I help you?” Inara asked still looking him up and down.
“ The name’s Jayne Cobb but enough with names whats the price I figure I should have enough here for a couple of goes.”
With that Jayne handed Inara who was quiet literally gobsmacked the punch and barged into the shuttle.
“You dressed awful fancy for a whore but that don’t matter too much you probably be out of them soon enough” Jayne as he began undressing, Inara just stood there in complete shock.
“Do u mind I like to have Vera here with me in bed” Jayne said
Finally Inara spoke “Excuse me Mr. Cobb but do you mind if I see your weapon for a minute I mean Vera is that what’s it called.”
Jayne looked at Inara and then down at Vera but he responded “Well ok just a minute don’t like people touching my weapon I mean Vera you can touch my other weapon all the time, Mal definitely did the right thing renting the shuttle to a whore, of course we can use my bunk too if you like”.
Once Jayne handed Inara the weapon she looked it over but cocking the weapon, releasing safety and aiming at Jayne.
“You sure do know how to handle that weapon getting me all excited lets get started” Jayne said moving closer to her.
Finally Inara flushed with anger spoke loudly pointing the gun right at Jayne chest and started pushing him out of the shuttle poking him.
“How dare you come into my shuttle get undress and act like a complete baboon, My name is Inara Serra and I’m a registered companion do you even know what a companion is? I think not you probably can’t even
However, I do have a couple of niggling points to make:
1) Mal would have zero clue who Vera is at this point. To me, Mal was geniunely mindboggled in "Our Mrs. Reynolds" when Jayne appears with Vera and gives his "Six men came to kill me and one of them was carrying this" speech to Mal. So Jayne bringing his Callahan fullbore autolock (with the double thorough gauge and customized trigger) with him in attempt to get serviced by Inara? Kinda runs counter to established canon.
2) I have a slightly hard time seeing Inara arm and point a heavy-duty gun like Vera at Jayne with any kind of intimidation factor. I believe she can kick Jayne's ass in hand to hand and probably could shoot well enough for personal defence...but actually give off the vibe she could utilize a weapon that has ammunition that could puncture Serenity's hull with any kind of success? I can suspend belief with the best of them...but I personally have a qualm about how much firearms proficiency you give Inara;)
3) Her general demeanour seems a tad off. Even when flabbergasted, Inara still has semblance of rationality and control. Her threatening Jayne with his own gun and getting pissed off to have a minor meltdown? Uh...possible.
Don't get me wrong...loved this chapter to bits! Just wanted to give a friendly critique of some points that are a bit out of whack. Feel free to ignore my thoughts with all due haste if you're taking the piss when it comest to Inara's first day on Serenity:D
BEB
You can'd take the sky from me
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