Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Choices

Saturday, August 26, 2006

Post-BDM,

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2482    RATING: 8.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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*Story based on one character after the BDM.

*If anyone would like to help make it better please help.

*Only a small story but I might add more eventualy.

*No character of Firefly/Serenity are mine, they all belong to Joss Whendon.

*Leave coments on what you think. I know grammer may need fixing, that's why I'm asking for a little help.

STORY:

She waits, unsure, stay or go. Don't know. She sit's on the bed, hand's folded in her lap as she hesitates on the choice which is her's to make.

Stay and loose what she had. Go and loose what she may have.

A single tear falls. These choices, they're complicated. She hate's complications. She wipes away the tear and gather's herself. She breaths a deep breth and closes her eyes for one breif moment.

This is it. The moment, stay or go. She still don't know.

She stands up, steadies herself and makes the first step's to her choice. Her final decision is only moment's away.

She leaves the place that was her's, and heads to the cargo deck. The crew awaits. In a row. Heads bowed down, eye's to the floor.

This is it. She stop's at the railing. The only word's to come out of her mouth are...

"I'm uh... I'm staying."

THE END FOR NOW...

Comments
Saturday, 26 August 2006 14:50
This was a very nice vignette. Good job....but you could use a beta!
Saturday, 26 August 2006 16:10
was it zoe? it was zoe, wasent it. needs beta.
Saturday, 26 August 2006 17:51
Very nice indeed, but yes, some grammar/spelling issues. I'll help you if you like.
ELK
Saturday, 26 August 2006 22:15
Hi bigwolf18, it was Inara, will she go back to the training house or stay. close though.

AgentRusco
'I'll help you if you like.'
If you don't mind can you me improve.

Sunday, 27 August 2006 00:51
Very nice snapshot. A little tidying up and it will be perfect. Is this the start of a series or a one off? Hope you write more. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 30 August 2006 06:06
Oh...gotta love rock/hard place decisions moments when it comes to the BDHs. Mainly cuz they never be simple or clear;)

BEB

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