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RNRZ - two deleted scenes...
Tuesday, September 25, 2007 6:17 PM
(a lot of pruning left one scene cut completely and another re-edited. I like 'em. Here they are...)scene one: Leather Men in space...
CUT TO Slow pan down FX shot of starfield – Ext Space.
The oncoming shape of a spaceship; narrow, fast, souped-up and just plain mean looking. We close in on the flight deck – tinted black windows – the camera moves throught hem and into:
Int. LEATHER MEN ship. Unusual for the ‘verse – it is a zero gravity environment. We see: F/X shot: pieces of hamburger – coins – a cd, whatever, floating about. The Leather Men are strapped into flight couches. LEATHER MAN 2 noisily slurping a milk shake.
LEATHER MAN 1 is gazing up at a monitor.
LEATHER MAN 1:
He’s dead?
BLUE SUN MAN: (off screen)
Apparently. An accident, climbing into a shuttle of some sort. The images came by security inter-wave. I haven’t seen them myself yet. Quite, um, foolish of him. (trying not to laugh)
LEATHER MAN1:
(to himself) You believe that? We only just – maybe after, I guess – we musta rattled ‘em… Dead. Well now –
(to monitor)
Dead – You believe that?
Cut to Int BLUE SUN Building. The same office seen earlier. The BLUE SUN spokesperson – gazing calmly into a laptop.
BLUE SUN MAN:
Belief is something I had removed – call it a contractual obligation… but the Father believes… - and yourselves?
The camera moves in to show the lap-top visual of the LEATHER MAN.
LEATHER MAN1:
Our main concern, right now – is payback – flesh n coin, Sir, twirls the wide verse around. So we do not consider matters settled.
‘Course, only so much we can do openly – without Mr Tam…
Cut to close on
BLUE SUN MAN:
Yes, I understand. I’m turning the matter over to our collections department directly.
Cut back to visual of –
LEATHER MAN1:
Ha! We too. Someone Tam won’t link to us –
And I’m thinking our man’ll get there first.
BLUE SUN MAN: (Out of shot)
Really?
Cut to Int Ship. LEATHER MAN1 grins at his partner – sharing a joke.
LEATHER MAN1:
Yep. No matter how keen your boys are – our man’ll be Early.
LEATHER MAN2:
Ha ha ha.
LEATHER MAN1 (cutting off monitor)
Suits.
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scene two: The Tam's - full version, more REGAN.
REVEAL: Ext Tam Estate. Day. Camera zoom in on entrance – we quick cut inside. To the back of a man, neatly suited. We realise who it is when we see his arms drawn back formally behind him. They are blue-gloved.
BLUE SUN MAN:
I’m very sorry for your… loss.
The camera is close – we see the blue-gloved hand clench.
The camera cuts then to close on REGAN TAM.
REGAN TAM: (sniffs)
Thank you – we’re just – we’re just psyching ourselves up to tell… River. Y’know? How do we… a thing like this…
She looks around almost blindly for a moment. GABRIEL TAM puts his arm about her. We see them in tight two-shot.
BLUE SUN MAN: (out of shot)
And she’s still at the… academy?
REGAN TAM:
Yes, we got a card just yesterday. (Laughs with frayed nerves and lack of sleep.)
She’s… happy. (looking up at GABRIEL)
BLUE SUN MAN: (out of shot)
Well, that’s something at least.
Close up on -
GABRIEL: (looking from BS Man to WIFE and back)
Yes – it was the one good thing Simon did – urging us to send her.
Pull back to two-shot of the couple.
REGAN:
He always had her best interests at heart…
The camera cuts jerkily – we see in med shot, off-angle, the BLUE SUN MAN.
BLUE SUN MAN:
Yes, I remember when he came to me for the details…
Cut to group shot – we see all three, homely details of the room etc.
GABRIEL:
Ironic isn’t it – River didn’t want to go - studying was… beneath her, frankly.
But we thought…
Slow zoom in on the couple.
REGAN:
It would be healthy – for them, the two of them… Healthy. Dear God.
GABRIEL:
We had no idea S
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