MANICGIRAFFE'S BLOG
Thrust and Riposte
Wednesday, October 18, 2006 10:42 PM
Pardon the fencing terms (it should be noted that I know crap about swords, except which end to hold. But Wikipedia knows all kinds of neat words).I'm trying to work out a lovely dialogue between a loopy, sarcastic Simon and cold, manipulative Mother. I've got the general idea, but it just doesn't have that verbal punch a fight between a brillaint doctor and his family should have.
Anyone wanna read what I've got and tell me how to make it not suck?
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